What I've picked out for my first venture is six sentences from my story of Maddie and Zac, A Knight in Cowboy Boots (now contracted to Pink Petal Publishing) and it occurs shortly after they meet in a hotel bar in Galveston where Maddie is considering applying for work as a bartender. From the first moment, they flirt heavily.
His lips brushed hers lightly.
“Does he?” Maddie forced out.
“Oh, yeah.” His tone was heartfelt. “And I think I may need a passel of forgivin’,” he said just before he kissed her again.
Did I mention this is a romance? (Like you couldn't figure that out.)
It was interesting, looking for six sentences to post. I kept thinking, "Oh, this is a fun scene. I'll pull something from this," only to realize as I read it that any sample that would interest readers would be considerably longer than six sentences.
This might be a result of my voice. I like understatement. Once the story progresses enough that the reader knows my characters, I like to have them make subtle gestures that signify emotion. Having read from the start, the reader will know how to interpret the gesture (if I've done my job right). Of necessity, a six sentence sampler doesn't have the advantage of that history. It's like walking in on the middle of a conversation.
I'll try this for a few weeks . . . or until I can't find six sentences that have a hope of giving you a picture of what my writing promises. Or until you tell me it's too painful and ask me to stop.
Other six sentence excerpts of mine can be found here.
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Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! You chose well. Love your six!
ReplyDeleteSix Sentence Sunday is fun. This is my second time doing it. Once you start, you'll realize how cool it is. You'll meet other cool writers too.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to sss! :-) It is hard to choose an excerpt that makes sense in only six sentences, I agree! Great snippet you posted here.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to SSS! It can be difficult to select only six sentences sometimes! But you did an excellent job - nicely done!
ReplyDeleteWelcome to SSS. Great sex...oops mean six
ReplyDeleteNice voice in this excerpt, and welcome to SSS!
ReplyDeleteFor my first few weeks I exclusively posted story openings for the exact reason you describe.
Welcome to SSS! I think this has great voice and lots going on between the lines (not to mention the sheets LOL!)
ReplyDeleteThanks, all, for the warm welcome.
ReplyDeleteGood entry into the Six Sentence group. Welcome!
ReplyDeleteNicely done six. Love that kiss!
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Six Sentence Sunday! Nice first six!
ReplyDeleteThere's a fun lot of six! I'll have to check into SSS.
ReplyDeleteBTW, thanks for stopping by my blog. :)
Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday. You've chosen well!
ReplyDeleteAnd you've also identified the pitfalls and advantages of Six Sentence Sunday. Hard to pick six that have meaning to a hundred people who've never read anything else by you before. But I think a lot of us -- okay me -- eventually arrive at the notion that learning to write tight makes us better.
I love your voice! I've been to Galveston plenty of times and nothing like that ever happened to me. I'm looking forward to more six sentence contributions from you in the future.
ReplyDeleteNice snippet and welcome!
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