This scene is between our hero and his sister. Rachel is the concierge at the hotel where Zach's lady love works. She's also the oldest girl of a very large family, so she can be a little on the bossy side.
Rachel spun toward him, dropping his arm to point a threatening finger at him. “No!”
Zach set his jaw. “I’m getting a little tired of being told ‘no’ by the women around here like I’m a puppy who’s just piddled on the carpet. I got no interest in working my way through your staff, but if I did, you couldn’t stop me.”
“Really?” She said, her voice dripping wicked speculation.
Zach’s body instinctively tried to suck his balls inside.
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I just spit out my drink. Well done.
ReplyDeleteLol! Love it - the interaction is spot on. :)
ReplyDeleteWay to stand up for yourself, Zach! Nice job on your six Suzie!
ReplyDeleteI love the characters. I want to get to know Zach a lot more.
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Awesome! I think he better watch out for his sister! She sounds like a feisty one!!
ReplyDeleteOkay, this one made me laugh out loud, but I refuse to type LOL.
ReplyDeleteGood job!
Put in his place by his sister! Awesome!
ReplyDeleteOh, I'm falling about laughing. Good one!
ReplyDeleteWay to throw down the gauntlet! Great six! :)
ReplyDeleteExactly the way a sister sets her brother straight. Love it!
ReplyDeleteOnce I got the syntax right, Excel randomly generated #9. That's you, Siobhan. I'll be in touch.
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