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This is from a piece I've been working on as a promotional short story. Georgia's just been giving her ex-husband a back rub, but he's now flipped over under her.
Sol's hand rose from her hip to trace her collarbone. The light touch jolted her, and Georgia's balance deserted her. She laid a hand on his stomach to brace herself and felt the muscles there tighten, becoming rock hard. He lifted his torso, his hand sliding around her neck to cup the base of her skull and pull her toward him. It was like sitting in a car on the freeway, watching a jackknifed eighteen-wheeler skidding sideways toward her. Nothing would get her out of the way in time.
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Nice six! working up to a hot snippet I think. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWhy would she want to get out of the way! LOL!
ReplyDeleteTaryn - Because nothing good will come from being with her ex? No, wait. Something good is coming... Or something like that. ;)
ReplyDeleteAlix - You read my mind. Or Sol's.
Love that she sees the kiss as a wreck waiting to happen. Great imagery and great Six!
ReplyDeletenice analogy. Good six!
ReplyDeleteGreat analogy! (Although, I'm not sure I'd be trying to get out of the way of Sol myself.)
ReplyDeleteHawt and sexy six!!!
ReplyDeleteLOL, great description!
ReplyDeleteAn eighteen-wheeler skidding sideways. Yep. Can't run from that!
ReplyDeleteWow, that analogy of the 18 wheeler was fabulous. I was pretty riveted by all the lines before though! Nice six.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure if the fact that I can completely understand her feelings of a wreck about to occur is good or bad, lol. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the slow-motion feel of an impending wreck, and your comparison to their coming together. Very original and effective.
ReplyDeleteLove the last two lines. Great conflict of emotion.
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